Although animal welfare has been advocated in the years preceding 1980, Ingrid Newkirk and her foundation of PETA has been the most important influence in the fight for animal rights.
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This is clear, demands research, has only one main idea,pertains to something in the past that is important, and presents an arguable stance on Ingrid Newkirk's contribution to the fight for animal's rights.
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